“What are you doing up?”
“I want to get my phone back.”
“Where’d you leave it?”
“Daniel has it.”
“Seriously? You don’t even need it right now. It’s 3 in the morning, just go to sleep.”
“I have to set my alarm.”
“I’ll wake you up. What time?”
“I need to talk to Katherine.”
“Okay use my phone and call her.”
“No, I don’t know her number.”
“Lucky for you she’s my friend too, so I do.”
“I’m leaving.”
“No you are not.”
“You can’t stop me.”
“Yes I can.”
“No you- Woah. Put me down.”
“You aren’t going out on your own until the sun is back up.”
“But I need to.”
“You can get it after you’ve rested.”
“I have to go now.”
“Why?”
“I don’t have to explain myself to you.”
“You do if you want your keys back anytime soon.”
“You suck.”
“Why?”
“I’m not talking about this.”
“You are gonna sit down and explain yourself.”
“I just want my phone back.”
“For?”
“For safety sake.”
“Not good enough.”
“What if my Mom calls?”
“Your phone will be dead anyway.”
“What if there’s a fire?”
“We will all be standing on the street together anyway.”
“What’s really going on here?”
“It’s none of your business. Now give me my keys.”
“You aren’t even answering my questions.”
“Please stop.”
“Alice, what did you do?”
“Nothing.”
“Just talk to me.”
“Stop it.”
“If you just answer me I can help.”
“Oh my God. No.”
“What is going on with you?”
“I have embarrassing things on my phone.”
“And?”
“Daniel has it.”
“Okay. I’ll be back soon. Go to bed.”
“But-”
“I won’t mess with it. Just get some sleep.”
“Fine.”
“I’ll be quick.”
“You better be. Wake me up when you get back.”
“Only if you actually go to bed.”
“Okay, go.”
This sounds like a conversation between a drunk person and the sober person that put them to bed. I was pretty interested throughout the dialogue but I wanted a little more detail. Why does Daniel have the phone? Why do they need to talk to Katherine? What would the mom have to say if she called? It would be cool if you included little random details like this in this piece through your dialogue.
ReplyDeleteReminds me of compulsion. The need. The absolute need which you can't explain to someone else and don't want to. Its just. A thing that you MUST have or must do. And imperative with no rhyme or reason. No one can argue you out of it, however reasonable or logical. You just have to do the silly little thing that no one understand why you have to. You just do. - D
ReplyDeleteI just realized the title was called 'Things I Need.' Reminds me of my own compulsive behaviours. Having my phone at all times happens to be one of them. I'm stressed and unrelentlessly agitated when I lose it or leave it somewhere by accident.
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